A Hockey Woman


A Hockey Woman

I see a big, strong hockey woman wearing a short, white dress and wearing long, white socks. Also she wears pink and white shoes. I think that the hockey woman is proud of herself because she might be the winner of the team. I see the hockey woman's blonde hair and it is in a pony tail. I see the woman wearing a mouth guard and i also see the woman's strong, big muscles. I smell the people's breath and hear the people cheering for her. I see the woman holding a hockey stick and putting it up in the air, holding it high. I think that the woman is also proud and strong because she is amazing. I feel the woman's soft long hair and see her necklace. It is very pretty. I am thinking that I am looking at a winner and a champion.


Henrietta

Comments

  1. Great piece of writing Henrietta. We really liked reading your description because you used lots of describing words. Prehaps next time you could put your sentences into paragraphs. Keep up the great work.

    From Simione, Kelly & Valensia

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  2. Great piece of writing Henrietta. I liked reading your writing because you use your capital and full stops. But next time you can do different words instead of writing the same word that you have done before. Keep it up.

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  3. Great piece of writing Henrietta. I like reading your writing because you use your capitals and full stop. Next time use a different words that you have done before. Keep it up.

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  4. Great piece of writing Henrietta. I like reading your writing because you use your capitals and full stop. Next time use a different words that you have done before. Keep it up.

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