Day at the Beach



I went to the beach and I bombed in the water and I went to the sand and built a sandcastle. I went to the water and I bombed and the water came up. We went to KFC and I went home and slept. I woke up and played outside.

By Beni

Comments

  1. It is great to see your first piece of writing Beni. Perhaps next time you could look for some other words to use instead of using 'went' all the time. That will make your writing even more interesting. Maybe use words like 'walked, drove, raced or jogged'.

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